Today I am going to show my work. What we are learning to do for writing is changing a telling sentence into a showing sentence by turning (I) into a (the). So we had a prompt, the prompt was like this picture of the sea, clouds and lightning. So any way I will be showing you my work. Here it is...
Find five things related to the senses to describe in this image. Start each one with ‘The…’
1.The lightning can hurt people.
2. The lightning struck's the water and makes big waves.
3.The lightning struck's the power line and makes is sparks
4. The weird smell of some sort of burning smell made me dizzy.
5. The loud and terrifying sound of lightning made me really scared.
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Hi Finau,
ReplyDeleteYou blog is awesome especially the sentence. My favourite one is the last one. Maybe add more of a sentence into the first one. Other then that is was a good blog post. byyeee
Hi Nevaeh,
DeleteThank you so much for commenting and giving me feed back. On my next writing blog I will do what you have told me to do. Please keep on giving me feed back so I can be more strong at writing.Thank you again.Bye!