WRITING Hotspot

Hello everyone,

Today I am going to show you my writing. We are learning to Be fluent writers and Write about ourselves and quickly organise our writing. Here is my writing......

Writing prompt

Strong words that you must include:

• Grasping
• Tumbling
• Creaking
• Sniffling

“No, no, no!” I was sliding back into the dream. I was screaming because I was going into a bad dream with my brother. Once we were  fully in the dream we were in a haunted and spooky house. 

We walked in the house and the floor was creaking right as we touched the floor with our feet. As we were walking, I kept hearing scary noises like if someone was tumbling on the floor. 

Then we were hungry and we looked for food in the cupboard and there was only one chip packet  And I grabbed it and smelt it, then my brother said you are give me some and I said no then he started chasing me then I decided to give him some by the time I stopped I was grasping. 

After that we decided to look around and we went into a room and there were lots of scary dolls and right when I looked at the scariest one I ran into the corner and started Sniffling. I decided to slap my face, When I slapped it I woke up.

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Hotspot writing

Hello and welcome,

Today I am going to share with you my hotspot writing. I have written a paragraph. This is what we have been writing. Here is my brain storm and my paragraph.

• I am doing an 800 meter race on a running track

I waited at the starting line to do an  800 meter run

• A man in a highlight jacket moved us around.

The man in a highlight jacket saw that I was taller than someone so he moved me.

• The sound of a gun fire 
• I bolted from the starting line like the flash.
• People cheering
• people’s feet behind me - screeching on the ground 
• The commentator talking on speaker
• My heart beating really fast
• A man in a highlight jacket moves us around.
• People in the crowd walking around

I was getting ready to run and all of a sudden a man in a high-vis jacket moved me to someone my height. And once everything was done the man in the high-vis jacket fired his gun. When he used the gun we started sprinting. Once we were in the middle I started to get slow but I ran and I ran and got in front of 3 kids. Then I thought I was almost there but it was so long my legs were numb. But when I almost stopped I saw the finish line so I ran faster but this boy was beating me but I ran faster and faster and I got in front of him and I ran right into the ribbon.

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