Malo E Lelei,
Today I am going to tell you about my writing. we have been learning to write a descriptive narrative.
We have been learning to change telling to describing.We have been using the 6 senses witch are feel/Touch,see,smell,Hear,emotion. We have been changing I to The in our sentence's. The sentence I changed I to the was. I was on a street near lots of shops and I changed it to the street was cold as I lay down and closed my eyes. The smell of hot bread wafted from the bakery.
My narrative is about me being homeless, this is my writing.
One cold dark night the street I slept on was really dark I couldn't see anything so I went to sleep. But then three men came and took my favorite necklace. I thought they wouldn't come back but they came back. They came back and they tried to kidnap me but I kept on kicking them. So they pulled out a knife and told me to be quiet.
Thank you so much for reading my blog. Hope you enjoyed it. Please comment and give me feed back.
Bye!!!
