Today I am going to be showing you guys what I have been doing for writing this week. For this weeks writing I have made a story about Two men getting lost in the forest. Here is my writing...
One fine evening two men decided to go for an adventure in the forest. Their names were Frank and Chris. In the morning Frank called Chris and asked him if he wanted to go for an adventure and Chris said “yea sure sounds great” Then Frank said i’ll come and pick you up then Chris agreed.
7 hours later Frank went to pick Chris up. When Frank got there Chris was already outside waiting. Frank yelled out his name and then he looked and said “coming”. Once Chris got into the car they started driving.
Once they got there they got off and started walking but they had no idea where they were going, they were just gonna go for a run and come back to the car. But once they ran into the forest they didn’t know where they were. Frank and Chris tried to go and find out where their car was but they ended up more far away from their car.
A few hours later they decided to just wait till morning. So they tried to make a little house but it was too windy. So they stayed close to each other all through the night. When the sun came up they woke up and started walking to see where their car was.
After 30 minutes of walking they saw their car so they ran to it. When they got there they went inside and were so happy. They immediately turned on the car and left. Once they got hope their wives were worried about them. The two men got hugs and had hot chocolate and also went to the hospital to see if they were alright.
The End!!
That's all for today hope you enjoyed it,please comment. BYE!!
Kia ora Finau,
ReplyDeleteWow, what a great story! You did a great job of clearly telling the story and using great language to describe the sequence of events. It was nice to see that Frank and Chris got home safely, I thought something bad was going to happen to them! In your next story it would be great if you could use some more language features to improve the story. Great job Finau!
Mr Tisch